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The advances in air travel are focussed only in first class and this seems to have left others with no benefits at all. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the 21st century, air
travel
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 has become the go-to means of transport for many. Some
people
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 believe the progression in air
travel
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 seems to be benefiting only the
business
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class
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passengers
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 while leaving the others behind. In my opinion, while air
travel
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 has become more accessible than ever before, the
airline
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 industry wants to cater primarily to its premium,
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business
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class
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 customers in order to rope in maximum profits. The evolution in the aviation industry has significantly brought down the
travel
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 costs for an average citizen. Today, it is much faster and convenient to take a plane to reach the preferred point of
destination
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 than spend time in other means of transport. It cannot be denied that the economy section has transformed immensely in the
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 few decades, allowing more
passengers
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 to accommodate than it could earlier. The economy
class
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 is by far the most travelled segment and best suited for a significant amount of the population who simply want to
travel
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 and not spend
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 other amenities.
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, the economy travellers can still access a few facilities by paying for more features; but only a handful of
people
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 do that. Certainly, the aviation industry likes to focus on
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business
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class
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passengers
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, who account
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 a significant percentage of their overall earnings. For an
airline
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, its
business
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class
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passengers
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 are often
people
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 who value time and comfort over money, and
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, are more likely to indulge in premium services offered by the
airline
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.
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, the airlines may make additional revenue by providing services
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 as faster check-ins, late boarding and early de-boarding, lounge access, high-end food and beverage menu etc. In conclusion, though
airline
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travel
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 is one of the most important means of
travel
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, it certainly allows a majority of
people
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 to afford the fastest and the most comfortable means of transport.
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, in order for the airlines to maintain the
travel
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 costs, they prefer making additional revenue by providing the best services to its higher-end,
business
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class
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passengers
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.

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