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some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our own life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #life #history #source #information
Do you think previous experience had tough you a lot
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 it was a nightmare for you? Some of them
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 that few folks are not learning anything about the past and
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 of them are applying and
had
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 a great experience in future. To being with,I will illustrate to the people who
against
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 that having a previous affair in
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their lives
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 was tough nothing.Due to repeating what they have done.And having a bad experience in life few of them are not believing that they can apply in future.
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,being teenagers they have
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 to do
such
 things that they think it was cool and make their life suffer.
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,
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,they appreciate and learned a lot
for
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on
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past
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.Mostly,
bad
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 thing was a great example of
this
.
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,nowadays we notice that few of the teenagers exploring the
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 things
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 they having pregnant at
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 due to curiosity.And it was a good sample for the other teenagers they will
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 and learned to be taking care so that it cannot happen to them. Despite
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them learned a lot and applied
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 future so that it will never happen again .
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result
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more
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sucessful
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successful
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lives
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their lives
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 and understand the value of life.
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