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Countries should produce the food that their population eats, and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons, examples to your answer.

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It is commonly believed that these days all needed products for their citizens should be strictly produced within every government. I strongly disagree with
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 statement as some sorts of meals are impossible to be made or found without bringing from
non-domestic
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the non-domestic
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commodity
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commodities
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.
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 with, it is well known that each crop requires a suitable climate and soil for
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its
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 gradual growth due to do different geographical locations.
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, it is impossible to every type of
food
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 in one country and some products are simply inaccessible, while in other areas they are laying under the feet.
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, seafood, which is
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 main and cheapest product for every individual,
only
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 provided in coastal cities, whereas in Kazakhstan, where a person can hardly reach the closest shore,
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 type of meal is a true treasure.
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, it is the most effective solution in
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 aspect to import
food
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 for some countries.
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, if any country is losing economically from the regular purchasing crops, the best way to compensate is to export other types of
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,
instead
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 of cutting meal imports and
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 human
being
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beings
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 without nutritional
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 ingredients, destroying balanced diet and adversely influencing well-being each of them.
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, Kazakhstan
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 illustrious for its
corns
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corn
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 and meat can export these types of meals
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far away
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 countries like Japan and import seafood from them.
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, it is crucially important to export abundant products rather than indecisively waste
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them
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 and import needed crops than
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 from
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their
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 deficits. To conclude, even though it is quite complicated and demands expenditure to get some supply from other countries, but it is absolutely better for economic stability and management of any kind of resources.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-sufficiency
  • trade dependency
  • food security
  • sustainable agriculture
  • local economies
  • carbon footprint
  • supply chain
  • food miles
  • agricultural sector
  • domestic production
  • import substitution
  • food sovereignty
  • global supply chains
  • trade imbalances
  • food standards
  • economic resilience
  • biodiversity
  • cultural heritage
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