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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising?

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It is inevitable that global warming is the burning issue of the day. There are many signs through which one can undoubtedly observe the grievous transformation in the climate.
Although
 there are several reasons behind
this
 change and most of them are directly or indirectly instigated by human activities. The different causes will be briefly discussed in the essay.
To begin
 with, the
Earth
 is getting hotter on an unprecedented scale. There are several gases present in
Earth
's atmosphere which causes the increment in temperature. The emission of carbon
dio
Correct your spelling
di
 oxide gas is one of the key factors in
this
 phenomenon. CO2 gas is emitted by numerous vehicles and factories,
this
 action leads to the deteriorating thickness of the ozone layer.
Hence
 harmful rays like UV rays fall directly on
Earth
's surface and eventually heat the planet.
Moreover
, due to the influx in population, people are cutting innumerable forests to get homes and factories. The masses do not think about the adverse effect of fewer trees and plants,
consequently
, there is a massive decrement has been seen in oxygen. Oxygen is a fundamental gas to lower down the rise in temperature but the absence of
this
 coolant contributes to global warming. In conclusion, there are extreme climate change occurs nowadays,
this
 will detriment the atmosphere gradually. The people should understand their responsibilities and act wisely in the account of saving our environment and lives. If it is not done,
then
 the future of our new generation, as well as our
Earth
,
Earth
 will be in danger.
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