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It is often considered that change is more beneficial to people than trying to avoid it and have everything remain the same . Do you think the advantages of changes outweigh the disadvantages?

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Change
 is the only constant factor in
this
 world, and one's ability to adapt to
change
 will determine a persons' survival. The greatest example we have is that of animal species who were not able to adapt to changes in their territories and thereby they died out. In
this
 essay, we shall discuss the pros and cons of adapting to
change
. On one hand, the major pro of
change
 is that it shows an individuals capability to adapt to any situation.
This
 is an asset to have in both a personal and professional life, as it shows your diversity. It pays dividends in an individual's professional life because it shows the management that
this
 person is an asset to a company, as he can perform any role, and work from any location.
This
 same concept is applicable from a personal aspect.
For example
, in 2018 I was asked to move to Bangalore and help set up a new account for the company I was working in because the management understood the roles I can partake in and my flexibility in my work schedule. On the flip side, running away from a problem is considered to be a huge disgrace to self-confidence. In spite, of avoiding the issues
people
 try to dig deep and to find solutions to overcome the complications, for an instance, due to the ego factor
people
 tend to develop mitigating a number of personal relationships with
people
 to be on the safe side. Even though
people
 tend to get rid of issues but they try to save their self-respect. To sum up, it is thought by many
people
 avoiding problematic situations and moving to a different environmental phase to gain a peaceful mind is beneficial while the biggest fall down is losing self-respect. In my opinion, having a peaceful mind is one of the basic fundamental needs of human beings having
this
 has an affirmative
this
 outweighs the disadvantages
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