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In some countries married couples plan to have a baby at a later age due to the demands of their professional career. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of it and give your opinion

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It is undeniable that in the present day, many
people
 have concerned about their life more than in the past, especially
for
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about
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 having a
baby
.
For instance
, in the past, many
people
 after they get married,
they
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just go for
baby
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a baby
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, but in the present after getting married many couples usually plan to have an infant after five or ten years due to many reasons,
such
 as demands of their career, financial stability, and age. The following paragraph will be discussing the
advantaged
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 and
disadvantages
 of
this
 decision.
Therefore
, my opinion and the conclusion have been reached. On the one hand, I believe that
this
 decision has many advantages for parents and their
baby
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babies
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.
For example
, parents will have afforded to work
hark
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hard
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 for
their
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 stability of their career,
such
 as salary that will
related
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 to
income
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 of the family, job security, and their position.
Other
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 reason is usually many
people
 decided to get married after working for a while and having a
baby
, but they still need to learn about adult life which is a crucial thing to have for teaching their children.
Moreover
, according to the research, many children that have their
parent
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parents
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 at
later
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a later
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 age could be more beneficial than young
parent
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parents
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 due to
financial
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the financial
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 stability and attitudes of parents.
However
, even coin has two sides of its,
this
 statement has
disadvantages
 of its.
Firstly
, there will be a problem for the parent because their healthy, usually the human body is perfect to have a
baby
 around 20 – 35 years old, after these ages the human body will start to have
a
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disfunction in the body system.
Secondly
, many
people
 at later ages are in a crucial position which
is require
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 high responsibility in their job,
this
 might be made them not have time for their
baby
. In summary, from the latter and former paragraphs,
this
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are
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 all of the advantages and
disadvantages
. In my
opinions
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opinion
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, I believe that the advantages slightly outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 because
in
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 the
modern day
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, there are some medical technologies that have been developed for those
people
 to resolve their healthy for having a
baby
.
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