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Band 4.5

Humans are basically selfish. Write a paragraph about 300 words to state that whether you agree or disagree with the statement. Include examples and illustrations to support your viewpoint.

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evolution
evaluation
evlution
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 of humans, its nature is always debatable. Few
people
 have thought that they are self
centered
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, whereas others
of
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the
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view that they are generous and kind. Personally, I am
completly
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completely
 in favour of the latter view that every individual should be selfless. In
first
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the first
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 place, human
being
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beings
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 have
in born
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inborn
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trait
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traits
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 of benevolence and altruism.
In other
words
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people
 tend to show
emapthy
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empathy
 towards others
specially
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 during
crisis
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the crisis
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,
thus
 transforming their sheer
selfishless
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selfishness
.Many
initatives
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initiatives
 at
regional
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the regional
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 and global
level
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levels
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make
this
 world a utopia. An environment where greed and
misrey
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misery
has
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 no place and humanity prevails all around.
For example
, during Covid 19 pandemic situation,
people
 have extended their support to each other to provide
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relief
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relife
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relief
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 in terms of ration or medicines.
Developing
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 nation has
advocate
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the
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vaccine diplomacy to reach
to
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underdeveloped ones to save lives. In other
instance
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instances
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, selfishness is not inherent, it is influenced by
the
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external factors.
Cut throat
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Cutthroat
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competiton
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competition
 in every sphere made
people
 insecure and even neglect the impact of their
action
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actions
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 on others for self
goal
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goals
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.
For example
,
business
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businesses
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 do lobbying and bribe the involved officer to meet their objective compromising the project which
affect
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affects
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 the lives of many.
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, recently constructed bridges have fallen
with in
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within
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 few weeks of its inauguration. World wars are the consequences of the greed of leaders which pushed the civilization
in to
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debt ridden
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 and intolerant dystopia.
Therefore
, I am against the statement, benevolence and altruism
has
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 made the human race
to
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flourish
since
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for
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 many years and it will prevail
generation
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from generation
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 to generation.
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