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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of playing sports and participating in physical exercises.

#sports #exercises
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As a rule, anything
in
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this
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own
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 benefits and drawbacks, the same with physical activities. For the most part, I believe that
sport
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 transmits
mailnly
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mainly
 good habits and positively influences to various aspects of life.
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,
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 heavy and daily exercises could bring negative sides. If
person
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over did
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 with
sport
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,
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, it would be harmful
for
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 their
health
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. A common opinion is that
sport
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 affects
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mental
health
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.
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 has been
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 and became widespread for the
last
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 decades. When a person
do
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 physical movements, the state of a person`s emotional and psychological
well- being
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 rises.
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, willingness to live and create something increases. As far as I know regular
sport
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 activity not only keep on tonus and ensure but helps to regain
health
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. That might be one
of
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the way
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way
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 to recover from illnesses.
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, it is generally convinced that
sport
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 can contribute to
keep
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 fit
themselves
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.
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, provides
with
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beautiful skin and
shape
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the shape
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 of
body
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the body
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.
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,
slim
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 body would be unless over
flexed
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the flexed
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 stick.
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of
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exercises left own footprint
in
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health
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. That will be disclosed
through
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the
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time.
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, professional sportsmen have a huge
health
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 risk.
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Furthermore
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 time to time feel
health
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 issues. By and large, regular physical activities are interesting if
person
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a person
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 finds suitable ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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