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Fast food is now universally is most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. some feel that is positive trend, while other do not. what are your opinion in this?

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fast
food
 is becoming a world-known meal in many places. Some communities think is a positive impact on their life,
however
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 others have a negative attitude to
this
.
Although
 I think fast
food
 is a delicious ready meal for many communities, It can have a negative effect on
this
 community. On the one hand, nowadays,processed
food
 endures themselves by many communities and plays an important role in their lifestyle.In fact, Many families have fast-paced life in a developed civilization and they do not have enough time to make homemade cooking.
Moreover
, They tend to take advantage of ready meals
such
 as a sandwich ,which is rewarding for them.
That is
 why most of the society is willing to use fast
food
.
On the other hand
, Some people think overconsumption of fast
food
 has a negative influence on society health and it can alter public hobbies.
Nonetheless
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 the fast
food
 has a delectable taste, they are detrimental to health . Due to high sugar and high fat, fast
food
 is an important cause of obesity in modern society.
For instance
, the USA has more public who suffer from being overweight than other countries.
Also
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 fast
food
 can change a balanced diet in children who are a vulnerable part of the community.
In other words
, fast
food
 can affect a public diet adversely. By way conclusion, I agree the fast
food
 is extending in the world as a perfect meal and it helps people in time-saving.
Although
, I think It is harmful to public health and causes overweight.
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