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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Global environmental problems are something that every living being
is having
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 to deal with, both in the developing and developed world. Some sections of society
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 argue that it should be dealt with at a global
level
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, whilst others argue it should be looked into from a national
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.
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, I believe that
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 problem should be addressed both
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 at a global and a national
level
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. In
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 essay, we shall look at both sides of
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 coin. First and foremost, from a global
level
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, countries need to come together to discuss the different ways in which they can individually contribute to a reduction in greenhouse
gasses
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. But, the point to note here
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 is that it is only a discussion, not a confirmation of what they will do.
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, the availability of various delegates can prove a problem.
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, the recent Global Summit held in Glasgow had fewer participants
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compared to previous years
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 COVID restrictions. Those who did not choose to come were frowned upon, and because of
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 pressure, they later decided to make an appearance.
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, if it is handled on a national
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, a particular country needs to only look at their infrastructure, and see what
they
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need
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 to do to become greener. Based on that, they can work on timelines that they create, and don't have to live up to the mightier
members
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 targets. In conclusion, I strongly believe that environmental concerns should be addressed on a global and national
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, from a national standpoint, they should
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 take control of their destiny, rather than let the more developed nations dictate the terms.

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You've provided a balanced discussion of both sides of the argument.
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Your conclusion nicely summarizes your views on the matter.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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