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Some people think that children should start school at the age of six or seven while others think that children should start school as young as possible. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is undeniable that nowadays,
kids
 need to focus on studying for their future to live in their society. Several
people
 believe that youngster should begin their
school
 life early as they can.
However
, many
people
 still have an opinion that it will be better if
children
 start
school
 at the age of six or seven.
This
 essay discusses both sides of
this
 argument and
then
 I will give my own opinion. On one side of the argument, there are
people
 who believe that the benefits of early schooling for
kids
 outweigh their disadvantages.
In other words
, at
this
 age
kids
 can learn and absorb several things better.
For instance
, there are experts who do research about young
children
 and proved that before 6 years old is an important time for
kids
to begin
school
 not only how they can learn and build social with other
people
, but
also
 they will receive emotional and thinking skills.
Thus
,
children
 have to go to learn these things in early life.
On the other hand
, there are many reasons for several
people
 believe that
children
 should enter
school
 after seven years old. One of
that is
 young
kids
 should spend all their time with their
parents
, they are too young to learn academic lessons and
parents
 should focus them to be great
people
.
For example
,
parents
 will have a day with their
children
 and they can fully focus and give time to
kids
 while they are still young. So,
parents
 will be aware of the habits of their
children
. In conclusion, having discussed the topic below, In my opinion,
parents
 should send their
children
 to joining the
school
 at an early age, to learning several skills both emotional and academic skills.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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