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Children should never be educated by parents at home. Do you agree?

#children #parents #home
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School
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 is an important part of our life.
This
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 is a stage in everyone's life and we have to go through it. To my
mind
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 people should go to
school
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,
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 because have many positive sides.
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 of
all
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school
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 gives you the opportunity to socialize.
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example
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 you can find
a new friends
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new friends
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.
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, you get a good education which you will need later to find a good job.
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, at
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, you learn discipline and become more organized.
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, when
teacher
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the teacher
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 gives you homework you have to write it on the same day because if you go to
school
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 without
do
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 it you will get a bad grade or a remark that will have a bad effect on you.
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, there is a lack of teaching qualifications at home.
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, when we stay at home, there is no one to teach us and tell us how to do things in the right way and we can learn the wrong manner.
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,
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school
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 has got and negative sides.
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,
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 is difficult and in many cases, they give a lot of homework that takes a lot of time to do it. In summary,
school
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 is useful and necessary.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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