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Some people think it is good for students to take a gap year before going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing so?

Numerous individuals believe that taking a
gap
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 period before enrolling in a higher education
establishment
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institution
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 may be an efficient action for fresh graduates. A
gap
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year
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 gives them the period to deeply think about
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what they want to do. Now I will explain my point of view on what advantages and disadvantages
in
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of
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 taking a
break
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 before choosing your way of
career
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.
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path.
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 On one hand, if you don’t decide clearly what major
that
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you seek to study or which educational establishment is fit for you, having
time
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 to reason about options for what is the next step after
graduate
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graduation
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 can be really beneficial for fresh graduates.
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,
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 of taking a
gap
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year
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, you will have a stronger vision and
career
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 plan in detail
due to
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 the fact that you take
time
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for reasoning
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 deeply about your future.
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, these days, quite a few students tend to opt for taking a
break
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year
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 before going to a university in order to they will be accepted by the most qualified universities in the world and clearly identify their
career
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 path.
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, despite the mentioned advantage, it can be turned into a waste of
time
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 that breaks without planning what to do during a
gap
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year
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. So, it is a pretty risky option
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 if you don’t have enough
time
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for taking
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to take
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 a
break
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 or
couldn’t
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can’t
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 enrol in your
targeting
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targeted
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 universities.
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, some students want to get into only their targeted educational establishment
,
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;
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 if they couldn’t, their
break
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time
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 would drag on for years. It is a potential drawback of taking a
break
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.
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, there are a number of advantages which give you opportunities to make the right decision about your
career
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 and find a more suitable way to learn
, unless
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. Unless
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 you plan specific things to do during the
time
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 off, it may become a waste of
time
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.
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, graduates should carefully think and discuss taking a
gap
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year
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 with their tutors or parents

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task response
State your view clearly at the start and give two or three main ideas. Stay on topic.
coherence cohesion
Use clear links to show how ideas fit together. Begin each paragraph with a clear idea and close it with a short sentence.
grammar vocabulary
Fix long sentences and grammar. Use short, simple sentences and common words.
structure
The essay uses a simple plan: intro, body, and conclusion.
content
It tries to talk about both sides of the question.
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