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Most people agree that money cannot be happiness. Why hapiness is difficult to define? How can people achieve happiness?

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Happiness
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 is something
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 not tangible, which cannot be measured on any scale or based on the number of possessions one has.
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 is why is it truly hard to gauge the true meaning of
happiness
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. In
this
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 essay, we try and discuss some potential ways to achieve pleasure.
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 and foremost, we need to understand that contentment can be defined in various ways. For some people, it could be as simple as taking a relaxing stroll in the park, whilst for others, it could be the purchase of a new watch.
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, many sports personalities get joy by flexing their financial muscle and purchasing the latest technology or vehicle available because they can.
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, many individuals get satisfaction by helping the homeless by providing them with food and shelter. There is no one way that a person can achieve gaiety. As mentioned earlier it varies for everyone, and thereby there is no hard and fast rule to attain it. I feel, that one should follow their heart, and pursue a course of action that has deep meaning to them, or has influenced them in some way.
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, it is a commonly known fact that people who celebrate festivals with their friends and neighbours are much happier than those who celebrate them alone. In conclusion, money buys you things, but not
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. Because I feel
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 is defined by moments, more than anything. Of course, others would disagree, but I feel at the end of the day when we think back on our lives, it is the instances that we always seem to remember rather than the belonging we had.
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