Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals.   Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is often an argued issue whether animals captivity is best or
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,
however
, some say that
zoos
should not be opened for
captivity
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of wildlife while others think that
zoos
are most useful for saving
forest
beast
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beasts
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from natural
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and hunting.
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essay discusses both viewpoints, I strongly agree with the former opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand, animals are suffered
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being
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in their entire life, its never release
untill
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until
died and
this
is a
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process. They are
also
a living species,
its
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has a right to live in their own land like
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but some social workers can be put on the cells
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in their
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fully,
as a result
, their breeding process can be affected and they might be
suffred
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suffered
by homesickness.
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, a
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recent
report by the Blue cross said that animals are being more aggressive whose being inside cells than living
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brust
due to
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they will suffer more.
Conversely
,
zoos
can be protected the wildlife from natural
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and hunting, nowadays animal
hunding
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hunting
is the primary adverse effect on
fauna
race. Natural disaster happens
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everywhere to around the world because of global warming while the protectors could save the
fauna
life by
zoos
.
For instance
, in 2020 Australia has suffered tremendously
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bush
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fire
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, a plethora of
forest
trees burned by
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while the Australian national animal which is Kangaroo has affected more and they did not have water to
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.
Hence
,
zoos
can be protected our wildlife from these natural repercussions. To conclude, all
fauna
are living with freedom because
this
captivity might affect their
bredding
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breeding
system and they will be more aggressive by mental stress. But these kinds of
zoos
can save a lot of
fauna
from natural
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catastrophes
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namely bush
fire
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fires
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. In my opinion, about
this
,
zoos
are
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useful aspect for nowadays and we have the
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to protect our surrounding species from any catastrophe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
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