In some countries university students live away from home and in another cities wile study. Do you think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages of living in another cities?
Nowadays, the pedagogical system has developed as compared to the past.But in many nations, students have to migrate to another place
due to
higher schooling. This
essay is in the discussion of merits and demerits and concludes with whose dominating.
To begin
with, undergraduates have a plethora of benefits as they live apart from their families. Because they will get self-dependent and gain an understanding of life
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life's
struggle
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struggles
For example
, many learners have been migrating abroad for academic purposes, thus
they acquire a knowledge of adapting to changes and hindrances of life. As a consequence
, their self-esteem and confidence in many aspects of life are enhanced. Moreover
, migrated students
finance organizing skills have upsurged. As they have to manage and earn their own money for survival expenditures and other expenses. So, in the Change noun form
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ahead time period, they do not face any kinds of financial hurdles. The aforementioned facts are strengthening the advantages more with the relevant instances.
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On the contrary
, new university students do have not much experience to adapt
new environments alone as Verb problem
with
the
high schools are a very caring training system, so they Correct article usage
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did
not get a chance to face the adaptation of a new place. Wrong verb form
do
Thus
they can get
panic and sometimes can be engaged with homesickness. Verb problem
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Apart from
this
, when learners get in the blue, there will be no family members to care for, consequently
, ,
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consequently
they can get worse health conditions.Add a comma
consequently,
For instance
, many surveys have claimed that university learners get some serious illness problems as they do not have anyone who cares for them at that time and they also
do not have the experience to handle that. these leading facts are made
pupilsWrong verb form
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do
not migrate for higher education.
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To conclude
, although
, it is true that pupils face any
hindrances Correct quantifier usage
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while
they get away from family for further
university education. Yet, I strongly believe that they can manage those problems and can adapt to the environment of a new place. As a consequence
, their inner personality will increaseSubmitted by jarsham5 on
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task response
Provide clearer and balanced analysis of both advantages and disadvantages of living away from home for university students.
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