Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Thesedays
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These days
, many presume that there are a plethora of options available in everything be it food, clothes, and shelter. Due to the global
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the economy has witnessed a massive
raise
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in
it's
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potential and
as a result
, there are multiple
things
for us to choose from. I partially agree with the given statement. Because not
everyone
has the same privilege.
To begin
with, the major cause for it is the entire financial industry has
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undergone
through an evolution.
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lead
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to an enormous spike in the average pay of the citizens and
subsequently
, it enabled people to purchase many
things
and the ability to choose
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them.
Thereafter
,
this
also
brought new business opportunities for many who now provide a wide range of products.
For instance
, my cousin who almost got 50% raise in his salary due to the 2015 economical boom in India, now earns probably 150,000 and
this
allowed him to buy many
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are
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necessary. So, there are factors
such
as the
afore mentioned
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one's which plays a crucial role in our acquiring potential.
On the other hand
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humans do not have the same scenario since not
everyone
works in the same domain.
Firstly
, for the daily construction workers even though there is a surge in the real estate these people still get paid
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amount only.
Secondly
, rag pickers
they
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are
also
the persons for whom
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the government welfare schemes are
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work.
Consequently
, the development in
the nations economy
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the nation's economy
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does not reflect the development in its people.
For example
,
last
year when nation rulers have provided a provident fund for all its working citizens many could not avail that
shceme
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scheme
due to the fact that they are not paying tax.
Thus
, there are
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of
things
in the market but not
everyone
can afford them. In conclusion, it
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that
nation building
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is happening at a rapid phase and its treasury is
also
rocketing.
However
, it does not say that all the individuals are
also
on a development path.
Furthermore
, the given statement is true but it is not valid for
everyone
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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