With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threanted to the point of extenction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with the problem.

Over the past few decades, people all over the globe are showing concern
how
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to protect
species
,
plants
and stop poaching because individuals are facing several
problem
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. In my opinion, it is extremely essential to protect them from
cause
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a cause
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that makes their existence in danger. In, the forthcoming essay, I will articulate some reasons and suggestions regarding
this
notion.
To begin
with, due to the rising growth population and fulfil their basic demands are the predominant reason
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for
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desertation
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dissertation
. It is
also
the cause for animals extinction
thus
they are losing their inhabitants as well as there are some
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of
public
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for their dwelling they just hunt
species
.
Therefore
, we need to protect them because they are sources of human food as well as without them balance of
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the eco-
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eco- system
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can be disturbed .
Moreover
, many
disaster
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disasters
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taken
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place like , drought, lowing water
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.
For instance
, the world environmentalists
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been conducted a survey and reported that 69% of disaster are
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the results
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results
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of folks irresponsible behaviour.
On the other hand
, there are
couple
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of
measure
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measures
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which help to protect endangered
species
,
plants
.
Firstly
, the government should launch
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awareness campaign in social media and in schools because communities can
lean
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learn
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importance
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the importance
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of those
species
and
plants
.
Secondly
, the official authorities impose
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laws
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as well as give capital punishments
also
.
For instance
, in Bangladesh, to protect endangered royal
bangol
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bangle
bang
rigger pass law for their conservation. To conclude, in my point of view as
a
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human
being
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beings
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we need to protect animals and
plants
because they are the source of our lives.
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