You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level.

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Dear Sir / Ma'am, I am writing

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letter to get

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detailed information about the walking tour in the mountains. I saw your brochure regarding

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trip to the

mountatin

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mountain

mountains

by walking. I personally love mountains but due to my hand

injury

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couldnt

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couldn't

opt for tracking there.

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, walking in

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the mountain

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mountain

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mountains

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is a dream come true for me as

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do brisk

walk

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walking

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everyday

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and it

wouldnt

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wouldn't

be a problem for me

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it.

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, being an

ashtametic

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asthmatic

patient, sometimes I face breathing issues at height and I might not able to keep going

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. Would there be any aid for the same and send me back home just in case anything happen? Since I want to ask for the

leave in

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advance from my work, if you could let me know the tenure of

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trip, when is the starting date and how much does it charge for the entire tour? I hope to hear from you soon. Thank You. Yours faithfully,

Brijal

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Bridal

Brinjal

Desai

brijal_desaiMon Nov 01 2021

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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7 paragraphs

167 words

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