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In many cities many prople are living in apartments and condominiums. Do these types of accommodations offer more advantages or disadvantages.

#cities #prople #apartments #condominiums #accommodations #offer
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At the present, an increasing number of
people
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 are choosing to live in
apartments
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 and
condominiums
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. From my point of view,
although
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 living in these accommodations are more convenient and more affordable , it
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 has disadvantages. In the following paragraphs, both of these advantages and dis advantages will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. Some
people
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 think that living in
condominiums
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 or
apartments
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 offer benefits in many ways.
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, it is affordable. The price of these things is cheaper than the cost of houses.
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, there is a lower cost to maintain, compared to a house.
People
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 can save a lot of money, for space of living of
condominiums
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 is not as big as a normal house.
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,
people
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 do not waste their time travelling because most of the accommodations are near the city.
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,
People
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 do not have to stuck in traffic and easy to travel.
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, a disadvantage of these things is that the space is limited.
Apartments
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 can not offer a big space as a house, compared with the same price
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 as water, milk and juice.
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, if there is a fire accident in the building, living in
condominiums
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 will be more dangerous
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 as being trapped in the building , unable to escape. I love you, mom and dad. In conclusion,
condominiums
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 and
apartments
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 have both benefits and drawbacks. Whereas It is easy to afford , it can cause tension and cause some risk of fire.
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