Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly poular.Some feel that this is positive trend,while others do not. What are your opinions in this.

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In recent years,in a majority of nations,fast
foods
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have made up
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most part of people’s diet.Yet,there remains a controversial debate
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as whether their
overal
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overall
effects can be beneficial or deteriorative.
This
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essay will discuss the proposed topic from both sides of view with some practical explanations.
Firstly
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,fast food
cause
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various health problems which are followed by some dangerous illnesses
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diabete
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diabetes
,obesity,and heart disease.A shining example is,some studies have revealed that the most of population who suffer from
coronary
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heart ailment, have an unbalanced diet like consuming pre-prepared
foods
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.
Beside
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that,a
boomb
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bomb
boom
of calorie will enter to
body
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as long as someone
consume
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these kind
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of dishes, which lead to overweighting.
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,by using
10 gram
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finger
foods
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,approximately 300 Kcals energy will be entered
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one’s stomach,while
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local food like Kebab just contain around 100 Kcals energy.
On the other hand
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,
this
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is
indisputable
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an indisputable
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fact that these meals not only are cheap to buy
,
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but
also
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are easy to prepare.A case in point is,in the survey which was done recently,the result has illustrated that the most reasons of using fast food
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related to cooking quickly and being affordable.
Eventhough
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they have a
low-price
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,have many destructive impacts on
body
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.It is
noticable
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noticeable
that
ones
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should prioritize health
instead
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of money. By and
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large
,it seems to me,despite the fact that having pre-prepared
foods
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are become universal in most countries, they have
destructive
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impact;
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cause irreparable damage on
body
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.For all being easy to ready
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being less expensive to buy, it would be in our interest to
limite
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limit
eating them.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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