Some people believe that teaching at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both and give your opinion

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While some people think that having
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is best for their development, others feel that it is vital to have their
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learn from a
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environment. It is certain
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topic is  debatable,
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  I believe that there are more advantages of having
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  learn from a
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environment than learning from
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since they can experience social
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with other
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and teachers which in turn will enhance their
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.
To begin
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with,
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at
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get to interact with a variety of students and different  teachers from different backgrounds. 
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  exposes the
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to wider social
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  to include different personalities.Not only does
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 contain
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from  different social classes but
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children
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   with different needs.
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, a
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will learn to get along with other
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  while playing and
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by sharing snacks during break hours.
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,the
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during the extracurricular activities will help develop
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's talents and teamwork that will teach a
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how to co-exist with  other people even in the future.
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,
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need that social
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at
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to develop both socially and physically.
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can
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help develop a
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as they get
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personalised attention during learning lessons.
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,
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will learn at their own pace since it is a one on one
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with the instructor. What is more, if the teacher happens to be a parent the
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gets more comfortable around their parents and can express themselves comfortably as compared to a teacher who is a stranger until they develop a relationship with the learner. 
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,parents will tend to understand the weakness of their
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since they are the primary caretakers.  In conclusion,  I believe both sides of
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discussion  have their advantages,
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, I feel that having
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in a
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setup is more advantageous as the scope of  social
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is wide  and it prepares
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 for the future world as compared to the
home
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learning environment
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