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People in big cities are facing many health challenges due to a high level of air pollution. What causes air pollution in big cities? Can you suggest some ways to deal with this situation?

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It is believed by some
people
 that the pollution is getting increased day by day in the big cities and
people
 have to face health risks due to
this
 problem.
This
 essay will discuss the reason and the solution for the issue.
To begin
with
Add a comma
,with
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 the
first
 reason is the increase in the number of cars and motorbikes. These days everyone wants his/her personal vehicle and does not want to
use
 public transportation because of bad services, so it raises the level of pollution in the air as well as the traffic on roads.
Second
, the smoke from the factories, because sometimes the factories are placed in the heart of the cities and it adds the more pollutants in the environment.
Third
, the rashless cutting of
trees
 in the municipality to make new buildings, roads or footpaths. The presence of less greenery is not able to clean air by absorbing the gases like carbon monoxide. There are many steps that can be taken by the governments and individuals to tackle
this
 issue. The
people
 can do carpooling and
use
 loss cars.
For example
, if 4 person works at the same company or place and lives nearby each other's place,
instead
 of using 4 separate cars they can
use
 one to go the work.
This
 will save the environment, petrol and reduce the traffic on roads.
Secondly
, the government should provide good transportation services and encourage
people
 to
use
 them.
This
 thing can resolve the problem because a bus can carry more than 40
people
 at one time but a car has a capacity of 5-7
people
. Another solution is, government and
people
 should try to plant more and more
trees
 wherever it is possible in the cities. The
last
 one is, factories should be placed outside the city and the government should check them and give them guidelines to not to make smoke on their level and reserve some areas for
trees
 to be planted. To conclude that, I believe that pollution is increasing but it can be tackled if we all plant more
trees
 and make
this
 planet more beautiful.
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