THERE ARE SOME MOTIVES FOR PEOPLE TO DO WORK.SOME PEOPLE THINK MONEY IS THE MOST IMPORTANT. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.

Everybody has
different
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perspective to do their jobs but some believe that wealth is very important. I strongly disagree with
this
idea. To commence with,
work
is
very
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crucial part of an individual’s life because it determines the capability, well-being and social status of a
person
.
Additionally
, going to
job
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everyday
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gives internal satisfaction to the
person
who loves his/her job.
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, if an individual is working as a team member at a multinational company that
person
will have
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to get up in the morning and go to
work
not only for money as well as to grow the abilities to become successful in that field and reach the top of the ladder to become
manager
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or chief executive officer at that company. It is undeniable that
psychological
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status of a
person
is
also
related to
the
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apply

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employment because if a
person
chooses to do
job
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a job

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in the field of interest
then
it will improve the productivity of the individual.
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,
level
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of satisfaction will be high because that
person
will be able
of
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get
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the
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sense of freedom and happiness which will automatically result in personal growth and development as a human being and improvement in self-confidence, independence and self-reliance.
For example
, if a
person
is not happy with the
work
he/she is doing, they can get easily bored and distracted because of
lack
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of sense of completion which can result in low morale and confidence.
Furthermore
, they end up ignoring their mental health and go to
work
only for bread and butter. Summing up, I believe that, other factors are
also
responsible for working and
than
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finances only for materialistic things.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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