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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In today’s societies, the trend of studying abroad is rising among university
students
.
Although
 they have to spend quite a lot of money, they would gain a superb
life
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 experience. In my opinion,
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 points of studying overseas surpass the negative aspects.
To begin
 with, the main advantage of studying in different countries is that they will have experiences that would improve themselves as people that would have been
otherwise
 impossible if they had studied only in their own countries. Studying abroad is not only mean studying subjects in the class
,
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 but including learning how to survive in that country.
For example
,
students
 have to adapt themselves to the local culture and tradition in order to live a joyful life.
This
 means that
students
 should dress the same as inhabitants, and
also
 be familiar with local cuisine. These overseas experiences would aid the student to be more understanding and appreciated in other cultures.
On the other hand
,
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 significantly high cost of studying abroad is one of the disadvantages that can be an obstacle for the
students
. Not all of the
students
 are wealthy, some might have to be in debt.
For instance
, my close friend asked their parents for a large amount of money
last
 year, desiring to join the overseas learning program of her university, so her parents had to work harder than ever to earn enough income to pay for
this
, and got a personal loan with high-interest rates which was quite difficult to pay off. In conclusion, from my point of view, studying abroad is more beneficial in terms of gaining life experiences, even though it is costly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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