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The government should spend more money on medical research to protect citizens’ health rather than on protecting the environment. Do you agree or disagree?

Modern
parents
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 hardly spend
time
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 with their
children
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, even in their free
time
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. There are a number of reasons for
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, and
children
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 are likely to face greater consequences of
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 lack of parental presence.
Parents
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 are less and less involved in their
children
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’s lives for two reasons.
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, some people continue to work after leaving office because many jobs require
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 extra labour. Jobs in accounting or banking,
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, usually entail heavy workloads which may not be dealt with during office hours.
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 leads to more
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 being allocated to work
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 of family.
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, many modern
parents
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 spend their free
time
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 on smartphones rather than with their
children
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. Since smartphones grew in tremendous popularity in the past decades, vast numbers of people have been drawn and attached to
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 devices for different purposes, be it simply reading news or engaging in social media activities. Spending little free
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 with
children
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 causes severe emotional distress and
behavioral
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 problems.
Children
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 who lack parental attention are likely to feel emotionally neglected.
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 may lead to lower self-esteem and antisocial
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, including delinquency, illegal drug use, and unsafe sexual relationships. More seriously,
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 may badly shape those
children
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’s personalities and
perception
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 of life when they enter adulthood. While
parents
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 who are frequently absent throughout the day can
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 be negatively affected, the consequences that their
children
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 have to suffer from are far worse. In conclusion, due to modern work requirements and smartphone overuse,
parents
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 hardly have
time
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 with their
children
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.
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 lack of parental presence does more significant harm to
children
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 than it does to
parents
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • moral obligation
  • advanced treatments
  • economic benefits
  • workforce
  • healthcare costs
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • comprehensive benefits
  • investment
  • global sustainability
  • long-term health security
  • disease proliferation
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