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It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

#it’s #time #ban #media #life #people #world #politics #self-image #spread #disinformation #experiment #goodbye
These days, social networking sites have gained in popularity as a substitute
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 face-to-face communication. In my opinion, despite some undeniable benefits, the growing prevalence of online
media
 brings about more drawbacks. On the one hand, perhaps the most noticeable advantage of online platforms is that
people
 can keep in touch with their beloved ones, regardless of
geography
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 locations.
For example
, members of families who are apart because of working or studying can easily use virtual conversational exchanges
such
 as video calls or texts to keep their families updated with the latest news in their lives.
Second
, social networks connect
people
 sharing the same interests no matter where they are.
For example
, Facebook offers its 2.4 billion users the freedom to join a myriad of groups and events which match their interests.
On the other hand
, the setbacks of social
media
 are more concerning.
First
, powerful social technologies downplay the importance of direct contact. Many
people
 prefer to interact online on their electronic devices rather than physical interaction, preventing them from engaging in real-life relationships. In
this
 sense, social
media
 will impede real-life communication skills
such
 as body language or eye contact which are actually of great significance in their lives.
Second
, the excessive reliance on social
media
 to exchange socially
also
 adversely affects the way users communicate. They get into the habit of using abbreviations, slang, and emotion icons to express their thoughts and feelings, widening the gap between them and
people
 of other generations, even creating some sorts of misunderstanding and discomfort informal situations. In conclusion, for the aforementioned reasons, in spite of
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 conveniences and
comfort
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 of online communication, I am of the opinion that the disadvantages that they have brought to our lives are more significant.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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