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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some
people
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 think that unpaid community service should be a mandatory part of high
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 programmes.
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, personally, I believe that it will positively affect society and the environment.
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 of all, youngsters will help other
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 keep the neighbourhood clean because sometimes one worker literally can’t respond for the whole block. Often humans are very disresponsible for the territory.
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, especially in
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 cases, schoolers will improve the situation.
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, after ,
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 a big group of teenagers will go to the area where it is dirty and help street cleaners thereby, blending seamlessly to mature life.
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, the younger generation
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 can be considered like future tutors. Following that,
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obviously
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 not all
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 can play
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 role. Actually, it will be much better if students who really want to teach others sport, science or just some kind of hobby, get down to it or especially students who are going to connect their life with
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 profession.
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, my friend Ramo really enjoys
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 an approach to teaching
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 but frequently nobody wants to listen to him because of his age.
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,
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usually
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people
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 find
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 programmes boring. But if the
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 will constantly force someone to do
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 work,
people
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 will consider it from the most likely positive side. To conclude, I strongly believe that the majority of
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 most likely approve of
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 an approach and in the future unpaid community service will be compulsory for high
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 programmes.
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, the environment will get benefit from
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 work.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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