Some people believe that scientists have the greatest influence on the world. Other people, however, think that the influence of politicians is greater. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It has been argued that politicians have a great impact on society.
Although
it is true in some
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, I believe that scientists are the real influencers in most cases. There are several reasons why the people in politics can influence
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. They are public figures and
that is
why can help in solving domestic
issues
. With resources, funds and power
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to them
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the government
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government
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they can help maintain the local infrastructure. Different resources can be allocated from them to build schools, colleges, universities and parks which can help the community. Most of these tasks
however
are
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not global. Another reason is that because most of them are good speakers they can spread awareness regarding important
issues
. By highlighting key
issues
of society, they can help people by starting a campaign in order to solve any issue. In Pakistan,
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prime minister Imran Khan identified the issue of global warming and air pollution and started a billion-tree plantation campaign. Under his leadership about a billion trees have been planted in three years and the topic of environmental preservation is now a mandatory subject in
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Scientist
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however
are
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the key influencers globally.
Firstly
, they are working day and night
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in
health
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care
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to serve and save millions all around the world. In
recent
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COVID pandemic, scientists have provided the world with
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the vaccine
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vaccine
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in record shortest time,
thus
saving millions of lives.
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, over centuries they have sacrificed their lives, comfort and families in order to make discoveries
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are now considered a structural component of society. Mobile phones,
internet
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, cars and machinery are a few examples
through
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they have helped the world to become a global village in which we are living comfortably. In conclusion, politicians are influencing the local communities by solving domestic
issues
and spreading awareness, I am of the opinion that scientists have served globally in terms of health care and discoveries.
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