Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, full-time
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has attracted widespread discussion in the public, and some
people
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advocate that young
people
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should receive full-time
education
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at least until they are 18 years old. For
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view, I totally agree with it, because
education
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is an essential part of
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. It is true that there are some drawbacks for some young
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to receive full-time
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before they are adults.
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, some teenagers are not good at studying and they think it is a waste of money and time to stay in school all day.
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adolescents, having received basic skills and common
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,
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can work in factories
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require less professional
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to earn a living.
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, it is difficult for some poor families to support all their children in school for a long time, which will heavy their economic burden. In fact, maybe a short-term skill training that enables these young
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working in factories is the appropriate way to improve the quality of living of themselves and their family. In spite of these demerits, I believe that young
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could better receive full-time
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until they are at least 18 years old. Primarily, as
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social and science develop, young
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need to learn more theoretical
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than ever before to adapt to modern society.
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, since a lot of work skills will become outdated in a few years,
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need to mastery enough theoretical
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to make them
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the ability of self-learning in their life
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of learning the skills
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exclusively.
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,
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full-time
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will bring about some financial pressure, they can obtain a decent job and return in the future when they become well-educated
people
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. In a nutshell,
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there are some difficulties for some young
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to receive full-time
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for
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least time, I believe that the young
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and our society will benefit from adequate full
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental cornerstone
  • literacy and numeracy
  • social inequalities
  • foundation of knowledge
  • social mobility
  • informed and engaged citizenry
  • democratic processes
  • youth crime rates
  • productive activities
  • vocational training
  • workforce
  • stifling individual talent
  • economic contribution
  • stress and mental health issues
  • unsuitable educational system
  • one-size-fits-all approach
  • diverse talents
  • career paths
  • formal academic education
  • financial strains
  • low-income countries
  • improving quality of education
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