in their advertising, business nowdays usually emphasise that that their products are new in some way why is this like? do you think it is positive or negative development?

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their
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a modern and cutting-edged, the effect on the consumerism should be taken into consideration. To illustrate, the majority of
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products
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and technology even if the old tools
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still effective.
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to exhort customers the needs for these
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large amount of trash adding to previous pollution problems. All in all, the publicity by emphasizing
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new features correlates with consumerization and litter problem.
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, organizations by informing
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about new options of
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based on their needs whereas
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the
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features which has been added to new brands bring more convenience and
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for customers
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because these are equipped
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modern technology and tools.
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, modern
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smart phones
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have leading-edge technology for photography which able
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time.
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in the previous years, individuals had to carry out heavy photography tools to take photos from their trip.
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, new qualities and hyping those bring more comfort to our life. To conclude, the new publicities focus on the brand new qualities that would cause the increasing trend in the consumerization,
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however
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it can have
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influence on the prosperity of
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approach without considering
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of
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in their new
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, we will see just increasing consumerism.
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