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in their advertising, business nowdays usually emphasise that that their products are new in some way why is this like? do you think it is positive or negative development?

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In the twentieth century, companies and corporations attach great importance to publicizing their
products
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. The advertisement aimed to persuade
people
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 to purchase the
products
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 by emphasizing brand new features that special
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 have. I believe
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 approach has both positive and negative aspects on industry and
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, so in
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 essay, I will discuss the pros and cons of
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 type of publicity. In terms of the drawback of introducing
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 as modern and cutting-edged, the effect on consumerism should be taken into consideration. To illustrate, the majority of
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 have a tendency to use leading-edge
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 and technology even if the old tools are still effective.
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 means that the organizations focus on advancement and state-of-the-art characteristics to exhort customers the needs for these
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.
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, the old version of
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 will be dumped as litter,
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,
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 would cause a large amount of trash adding to previous pollution problems. All in all, the publicity by emphasizing new features correlates with consumerization and litter problem.
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, organizations by informing
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 about new options of devices, give them a great opportunity to select
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 based on their needs whereas
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 in the past, did not have access to full information about gadgets.
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 the state-of-the-art features which have been added to new brands bring more convenience and prosperity for customers because these are equipped with modern technology and tools.
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, modern smartphones have leading-edge technology for photography which able
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 to telephone and camera at the same time.
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 in the previous years, individuals had to carry out heavy photography tools to take photos from their trip.
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, new qualities and hyping those bring more comfort to our life. To conclude, the new publicities focus on the brand new qualities that would cause the increasing trend in the consumerization,
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 it can have a worthwhile influence on the prosperity of
people
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. If the promoter just uses
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 approach without considering the comfort of
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 in their new
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, we will see just increasing consumerism.
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