Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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food

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and beverage industry is considered

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component

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national

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economy. In

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concept, numerous manufactures use sweeteners as attractive factors,

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behind negative potential health problems.

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perspective leads to an argument that sugary products should be elevated in price to reduce consumption.

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, I strongly believe that

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is not the possible solution for

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issue, which will be explained

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below.

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of all,

common

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taste of sweetness is ultimately difficult to adjust.

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, some manufacturers use

sugar

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in their products to satisfy their

customer

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customers

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sense.

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, a brand of coffee named

Nestcafe

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Nescafe

had reduced their sweet level in canned milk coffee in

Vietnam

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the Vietnam

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market, their strategy

meant

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to emerge the awareness of diabetes;

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, they failed to hold 30% of their customers over their rival, Highland coffee brand.

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, sweet accommodation would be more

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than good in

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strict industry.

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, manufacturers would find other resources if

sugar

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cost is unproperly high,

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could result in unpredictable consequences. Because chemical sweetener which is easily synthesized from artificial factors

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more and more popular recently, entrepreneurs may utilize

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as a substitution in case of unaffordable sugary cost.

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,

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investigation in 2018 across multiple street stores in Vietnam, 60% of food and drink sellers use chemical

sugar

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in their dishes to serve temporary customers. The long term

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affect

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effect

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of

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artificial substitution,

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, has never been assured by scientists so far.

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, costly true

sugar

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is harmful in some cases. In conclusion, high levels of

sugar

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in industrial products which could cause harm to health emerge the argument of elevating sugary

price

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prices

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. By several disadvantages I mentioned above,

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solution would not work effectively. In order to encourage less sugary consumption, multiple strategies should be approved to illustrate

drawbacks

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the drawbacks

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of high sugary levels on health.