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Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#someone #luck
Some will agree with the point that
luck
 plays a vital role to achieve endeavours. Simultaneously, some will deny
this
 and will stick to talent and hard
work
 are the key to achieving success. My opinion is both
luck
 and hard
work
 is important in fulfilling any task.
Luck
 cannot be measured, but it is useful because even we are doing much hard
work
 , at the right stage or situation we may encounter challenges with the environment, natural calamities, or physical injuries like accidents or ill health. So some will stick to the fact that stars should be aligned perfectly for doing any task. If we come across sports, sportsmen will
work
 harder to play a wonderful game, but if any ill health comes before the game things will change. To accomplish the tasks or to achieve our
goals
luck
 plays a vital role.
On the contrary
, hard
work
 and talent are the keys to achieving our
goals
 without
luck
. If we plan everything prior to tasks,
then
 we can definitely achieve
goals
.
Luck
 is something
that is
 not under human control and thought. My opinion is
luck
 is a belief and hard
work
 is our attention and vision to achieve our
goals
. These two should
work
 collaboratively as one will enhance the physiological standards like stress relief as the other will enhance the physical potentiality in fulfilling the tasks and
also
 in achieving
goals
. One should always possess and believe in both
luck
 and hard
work
 .py life.
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