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With growing population in cities, more and more people live in a home with small or no outdoor areas. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays we are witnessing a rapid increase of population in urban areas which leads to residing in premises with little or no outdoor
space
. In my opinion, it is certainly a negative aspect for a few reasons. The
first
 issue might be the lack of social and physical activities. To be more precise, if there is not enough outdoor
space
 or literally no
space
 at all, it will definitely deprive families of having leisure time
such
 as spending their get-togethers on a fresh area or relishing food alfresco.
For instance
, in the USA parents
tend
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 play basketball with their offspring or to make barbecues at weekends and on national holidays.
Consequently
, not only will
this
 neglect have an adverse effect on dwellers’ frame of mind, but
also
 it will break the practice in the local communities. Another detrimentally influenced by
space
 deficiency factor is farming. Undoubtedly, some individuals particularly seniors are fond of cultivating organic food in the area where they live. To illustrate, products like vegetables and fruit are quite costly in some northern
part
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 of Russia.
Therefore
, in order to supply green food for
forthcoming
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 winter citizens maintain a garden, yet without enough
room
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 they are denied
this
 opportunity.
As a result
, people will start having problems with their
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 and health
condition
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 which will undeniably deteriorate
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 of place in
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society. Taking all aspects into consideration they point me to the conclusion that under no circumstance should the rapid population growth negatively affect people’s place of living in order to retain wholesome surroundings in the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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