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Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian rilef during natural disaster.Do you agree or disagree?

#nations #countries #rilef #disaster
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A commentator considers that developed
countries
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 should provide humanitarian aid to underdeveloped
countries
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 during natural emergencies.
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 essay agrees that it is our duty as humans to help poor
countries
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 in a natural disaster.
firstly
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 ,Rich
countries
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 should provide basic
support
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 to poor
countries
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 because they are much better than developing
countries
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 in various sectors
such
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 as health care, science , transport and equipment so on.
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, During covid-19 in 2020
India
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 do not have
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 a storge health care system in
India
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 and
people
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 do have enough money to get expensive medicine. so in
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 pandemic
time
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 rich
countries
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such
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 as Canada and American come forward to
support
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India
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 to bring covid vaccine dose and to save
people
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 life that makes a good bond between both
nations
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.
secondly
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 , Rich
nations
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support
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 other
countries
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 during natural urgency ought to they can experiment with their new equipment and products to secure
people
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 lives like their new medicine. after that , if they get success in
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then
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 they can establish some new business in poor
countries
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 that
also
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 help in boost their economy and
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 provide employment to the low-level country community.
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, during
last
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 year flood in Mumbai
India
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, Canada famous company provide emergency kits to
people
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 during disaster situations
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is
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 so popular in other's
countries
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 too because it saves the lives of
ofthousands
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thousands
of thousands
people
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. The conclusion is that in my view developed
nations
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 should
support
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 poor
nations
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 during pandemic situations to survive in their hard time that creates good relationships and gives moral
support
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 to underdeveloped
countries
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • humanitarian assistance
  • natural disaster
  • wealthy nations
  • poorer countries
  • relief
  • moral obligation
  • resources
  • effective
  • global stability
  • image
  • reputation
  • long-term recovery
  • resilience building
  • collaboration
  • mutual benefits
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