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Nowadays university education is considered very important for people's future. However, there are a lot of successful people who didn't get higher education. Do you think that higher education is necessary to succeed in life? Justify your opinion with relevant examples.

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Today's
world
 is likely to be more competitive in society ,particularly in career pathways. Graduating from university or academic institutes will be more crucial things which are required for living.
On the other hand
, many successful
people
 had not
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finished university. In my opinion, I think that a high level of knowledge cannot guarantee achievement, and the following examples will be provided to support my point of view.
To begin
 with, it is clearly seen that many famous
people
 of the
world
 have not graduated from high
education
such
 as Mark Zuckerburg, Bill Gates or Steve Jobs.
This
 will prove that successful
people
 do not need to have high
education
, whereas the way of thinking is more important and the way to give the meaning of "succeed". Some
people
 think that being a wealthy person is an equally successful person,
on the other hand
, some
people
 think that graduating with a PhD. A degree is a high accomplishment of life.
Therefore
, success depends on each person who gives the meaning. In my opinion, it is undeniable that nowadays
education
 is the one measurement for judging
people
's capacity, especially in the material
world
.
For instance
, according to the latest survey conducted by Bangkok University, it has been revealed that more than 80% of large organisations in Thailand would like to require high qualifications for new candidates, which leads to society's value.
However
, not only all of them who have graduated from an academic institute will succeed in their soul, but
also
 they need to have many qualifications
such
 as enthusiasm, honesty, diligence or even management skills.
Therefore
, I think basic
education
 is necessary to living in today's nature, but higher
education
 can not guarantee that will bring success into their life. In conclusion, I believe fundamental knowledge is essential to living in the present
world
, while higher
education
 cannot promise accomplishment,
thus
people
 should find the individual talents which lead to reaching the goal of life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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