discuss, The older you get , the more difficult life becomes.

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Each
person
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will come across all the stages of
life
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. It is believed that, when an individual becomes older,
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life
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turns into tragedy.
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is true in
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recent era and I agree with
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statement.
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essay describes the reasons for the former view. To commence, each
person
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will grow into old. When
life
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began as an infant, start to crawl and slowly learn to walk and talk. They are dependent on their parents, who helps them as a support system. But, when the same individual
grown
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as an old man, the situation becomes worse. Being old, even they need help to walk and perform certain chores.
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,
people
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are not willing to do
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such
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help.
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makes the number of
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are
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joining in the old
age
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home.
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, old
age
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homes are increased nowadays when compared to
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the previous
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period.
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, a friend of mine, who joined his
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grandfather
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in an old
age
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home recently because he could not able to walk.
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, elderly
people
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should learn to lead their
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in
healthy
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a healthy
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way in order to overcome
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situation. If a
person
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stays fit, the need of visiting
hospital
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the hospital
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is not necessary.
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reduce
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their dependency on others.
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to
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, they feel that they were in
insecurity
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an insecurity
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state. They might think, though surrounded by few
peoples
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people
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, but still they were not
in
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insecure
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secure
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a secure
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stage. To conclude, each
person
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will face
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a struggle
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struggle
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struggles
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in
many
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any
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situation
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, despite he is old or young. But, in old
age
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, it is more difficult to have food or to maintain health. Based on the aforementioned reasons, when
people
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getting
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older their
live
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lives
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turn
into
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difficult.
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