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Some people believe that the best way to increase the road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars. To what extent do you agree?

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It is believed that increasing of minimum legal
age
 for driving cars is the best
way
 to ensure
road
safety
. I disagree with
this
 statement because
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age
 nowadays is great and there are better ways to
increase
road
safety
. In my opinion, the minimum legal
age
 for car driving nowadays is in a good spot.
Although
 some teenagers are too young to
drive
 a car as they tend to not follow the
road
rules
, increasing the minimum legal
age
 is
also
 not the right
way
 to fix it. One of the drawbacks of increasing the minimum legal
age
 is it creates inconvenience in transportation as
people
 have to be old enough to
drive
. In the worst case, some teenagers are going to break the
rules
 to
drive
 even if they have not reached their
age
.
Therefore
, I think better enforcement of the laws might be a better
way
 to
increase
road
safety
. On top of that, I think it does not depend on
age
 to make the
road
 safe, everyone can be a lawbreaker if they want to.
Instead
, there should be an evaluation for the knowledge of driving cars every 1 or 2 years,
for example
.
Moreover
, the government can
increase
 the difficulty of driving license's examinations, to make sure that
people
 are knowledgeable enough to
drive
 a car safely.
However
, in many countries including Thailand,
people
 just simply do not follow the
road
rules
 despite knowing them. So I think that the best
way
 to
increase
road
safety
 is that police need to enforce the
road
rules
 more strictly. In conclusion,
although
 some individuals believe that increasing the minimum legal
age
 for driving cars is the best
way
 to ensure
road
safety
, I think that enforcing the
road
rules
 better is a better solution. Because increasing the minimum legal
age
 to
drive
 can cause inconvenience in transportation and some
people
 just do not want to follow the
road
rules
 even though they are old enough to
drive
.
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