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Some people believe that the best way to increase the road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars. To what extent do you agree?

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It is believed that increasing of minimum legal
age
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 for driving cars is the best
way
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 to ensure
road
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safety
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. I disagree with
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age
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 nowadays is great and there are better ways to
increase
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road
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safety
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. In my opinion, the minimum legal
age
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 for car driving nowadays is in a good spot.
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 some teenagers are too young to
drive
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 a car as they tend to not follow the
road
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rules
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, increasing the minimum legal
age
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 is
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 not the right
way
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 to fix it. One of the drawbacks of increasing the minimum legal
age
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 is it creates inconvenience in transportation as
people
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 have to be old enough to
drive
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. In the worst case, some teenagers are going to break the
rules
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 to
drive
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 even if they have not reached their
age
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.
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, I think better enforcement of the laws might be a better
way
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 to
increase
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road
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safety
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. On top of that, I think it does not depend on
age
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 to make the
road
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 safe, everyone can be a lawbreaker if they want to.
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, there should be an evaluation for the knowledge of driving cars every 1 or 2 years,
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.
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, the government can
increase
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 the difficulty of driving license's examinations, to make sure that
people
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 are knowledgeable enough to
drive
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 a car safely.
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, in many countries including Thailand,
people
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 just simply do not follow the
road
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rules
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 despite knowing them. So I think that the best
way
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 to
increase
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road
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safety
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 is that police need to enforce the
road
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rules
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 more strictly. In conclusion,
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 some individuals believe that increasing the minimum legal
age
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 for driving cars is the best
way
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 to ensure
road
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safety
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, I think that enforcing the
road
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rules
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 better is a better solution. Because increasing the minimum legal
age
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 to
drive
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 can cause inconvenience in transportation and some
people
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 just do not want to follow the
road
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rules
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 even though they are old enough to
drive
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.
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