Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the midst of
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technology-driven global world, modern arts play an important role in the day to day life.Modern arts are
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a language of souls,it speaks a lot.Admittedly,some of the modern
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get more value for their
work
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, the rest of
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fight to exist.Government authorities should take necessary action to solve
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scenario. I totally agree with
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opinion.
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of all,let me clarify my point.Obviously,all the
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are not having the same capability,some are excellent at their
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some are just average.
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,if a person makes his carrier on it,at least he could manage his daily needs from
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income.For
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,the corresponding department should make a minimum value for their creatures and they should make sure that it won't be going below the minimum price.
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,from
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I mean to tell that,it will help to get a minimum wage for all
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. Apparently,all
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are not getting enough exposure to explore their
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.Ostensibly, the public has a mentality that they will get artworks from famous
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only,even though there are good
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by others,
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the government should conduct an exhibition monthly basis to exhibit all
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work
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under one roof by hiding the
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name from their creature.
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, people get more options to choose and those
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are impressed by folks they just buy them.
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,good
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get paid well.
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,
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year I went to
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kind of exhibition with my friend even though modern art was not my cup of tea.After entering there I liked some modern art and I bought it.I didn't know who has created it till I paid the bill
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after payment only they disclose the
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name,surprisingly it was a new young
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's
work
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.That I kept in my living room.Those who visit my home really like that
work
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and ask me about it. To sum up, everything that I have been explained so far,In our society all modern
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are not paid well for their
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,people tend to buy products from
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artist
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only,
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, some
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who even has excellent creatures are not getting enough attention or payment.
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is really an unfair situation.By putting a minimum wage guarantee for all modern artworks can solve
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issue.
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action should be taken by the government authority with some other steps(by promoting all modern arts).
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all
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have a chance to publish their
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to the public and get a good earning for their job.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income disparity
  • struggling artists
  • market demand
  • public preference
  • government support
  • grants
  • funding
  • exhibitions
  • cultural wealth
  • societal benefits
  • market dynamics
  • government intervention
  • art market
  • public taste
  • private investment
  • balanced artistic community
  • financial assistance
  • creative industry
  • artistic merit
  • economic sustainability
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