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Some people think that radio is the best way to get news while others think that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #radio #news #television #purpose
In an era of information and communication,
where
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every
minutes
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 some
news
are
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 in making around the globe,
news
are
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 imperative for making decisions, which may be political ,
economical
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 etc. It
is often argue
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 that
radion
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 is the best way to get information
were
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 as others believe that TV
serve
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serve
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the purpose better. I will discuss both
the
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aspects in
this
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therby
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giving
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 my opinion in conclusion.
To begin
 with,
radio
 is
better
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 medium for information for several reasons.
Firstly
, its portability makes it easy to carry while travelling.
Hence
,
this
 device is used in almost all types of vehicles for entertainment and
news
.
Secondly
.
radio
 connectivity is available to almost all the remote location of a country, where all other devices
fails
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 to operate.
For instance
,
radio
 instruments are used by the Indian military in the high range mountains areas, where only radion connectivity is available for
news
 and communication.
Furthermore
,
device
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 is affordable as
compare
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 to TV ,
hence
, it is used by
mass
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.
For example
,
developing
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 countries like India, for
news
 almost 60% of the population is dependent on
radio
 for
news
, as per
a
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recent research.
However
,
on the other hand
, many believe TV is
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better way
betterway
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 to collect
informations
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information
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 as it
provide
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 both visuals and audio.
Furthermore
, many
news
contain
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 data and graphs which can only
be understand
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 through watching them along with
listening
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it
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them
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.
Additionally
, people have
privilege
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the privilege
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 of watching the
concern
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 person, around whom the
news
are
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 made. To conclude, both aspects have their own supporters . But, if I consider the facts logically, I strongly believe the
radio
 is
better
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a better
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 way for acquiring
news
 due to its affordability, connectivity and portability.
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