Some people think that radio is the best way to get news while others think that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In an era of information and communication,

where

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every

minutes

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some

news

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in making around the globe,

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imperative for making decisions, which may be political ,

economical

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etc. It

is often argue

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that

radion

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radio

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is the best way to get information

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as others believe that TV

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serve

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the purpose better. I will discuss both

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aspects in

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essay and

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my opinion in conclusion.

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with,

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better

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medium for information for several reasons.

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, its portability makes it easy to carry while travelling.

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device is used in almost all types of vehicles for entertainment and

news

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radio

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connectivity is available to almost all the remote location of a country, where all other devices

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to operate.

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instruments are used by the Indian military in the high range mountains areas, where only radion connectivity is available for

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and communication.

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device

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the device

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is affordable as

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to TV ,

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, it is used by

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developing

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countries like India, for

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almost 60% of the population is dependent on

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for

news

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, as per

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recent research.

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on the other hand

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, many believe TV is

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better way

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to collect

informations

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information

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as it

provide

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both visuals and audio.

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, many

news

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contain

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data and graphs which can only

be understand

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be understood

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through watching them along with

listening

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them

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, people have

privilege

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the privilege

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of watching the

concern

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person, around whom the

news

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are

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made. To conclude, both aspects have their own supporters . But, if I consider the facts logically, I strongly believe the

radio

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better

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a better

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way for acquiring

news

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due to its affordability, connectivity and portability.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

283 words

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