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People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the modern
world
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 a community show a tendency to become
parents
 in middle age.
This
 essay will argue that the advantages outweigh the drawbacks. The essay will argue that the background received to mature ages makes the process of growing
children
 more conscious and uncomplicated which is more beneficial for families than weak sides that are related to declining a
health
 condition in that age. It is commonly known that in their 30s people usually accumulate sufficient experience, have a stable job and
some
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 properties. That's all can be considered as bright sides for planning pregnancy, because families in most cases don't have big financial difficulties anymore, they are more prepared to be
parents
 than in younger ages when probably they would be busy building a career or finishing education. A recent British survey showed that women who started their motherhood after 30 years old feel happier and more confident having offspring than those who did it earlier. Another point might be the ability to take responsibility for
such
 important decisions which make planning
children
 more conscious and morally prepared.
As a result
,
children
 in
such
 families are growing up in more favourable conditions getting enough attention and appropriate upbringing. Despite so many advantages, having
children
 at older ages may be challenging due to some
health
 issues. Possibly, older
parents
 don't have so much energy as youngsters and after 30 years people more often face chronic diseases which make parenting time slightly more complicated compared to young
parents
.
However
, a lot of personal examples prove that
this
 drawback can be solved easily by taking care of a
health
 and preventing some predictable conditions with a family doctor. To conclude, the fact that older
parents
 are more prepared mentally and physically to have
children
 clearly outweighs the potential
health
 issues which can be prevented in advance.
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