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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
It is obvious that
to communicate
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 with other
language
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languages
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 is challenging.
Although
 many
people
 use
secound
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second
language
 as
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a mean
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mean
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means
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 of communication.
Moreover
, when
stay
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staying
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 in
other
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another
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 country and to match with them is difficult due to
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language
langauge
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the langauge
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barrier
.
i
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I
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 firmly agree with
this
langauge
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language
barrier
 is the reason
of
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for
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 social and practical difficulty.
i
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I
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 shall explain my opinion in the following paragraphs. To commence with,Every
language
have
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own
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its own
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entites
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entities
.
Although
people
 move to
foreign
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a foreign
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 country for a certain period they do not learn to their own
language
 but when they make
decision
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the decision
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 to live in a long period need to learn but sometimes
language
barrier
 is big issues and that rise a social
problems
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problem
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.
for instance
,if you go to china
then
 you have
face
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to face
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language
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a language
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barrier
. you will not make someone understand with
chines
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Chinese
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language
 because
this
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is
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totally unknown to you.
On the other hand
, if you attend in
occasion
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the occasion
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 in chines communities you have to set down in a corner because you do not know how
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to
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speak out in chines
language
.
In addition
, the majority of the
people
 in developing countries move to develop
state
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states
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with a view to work.
Therefore
, they come up with various difficulties.
Moreover
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 they are export in relevant
sactors
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sectors
 but they need to provide
language
 skill
otherwise
, they hardly get a chance for working.
for example
, if anyone intends to work in Poland they must know the polish
language
. To summarize,Globalization
make
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makes
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easier
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it easier
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 to move
one
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from one
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 place to
other
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another
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 location.
therefore
,without knowing
foreign
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a foreign
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language
people
 face social and
language
 difficulties.for
this
 reason .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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