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Write about the following topic. Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Teachers play an inevitable role in the student's life. So, globally swapping of the
students
 have its pros and cons. There are for and against everything but I choose to look at the positives. The
first
 point of advantage is that the
students
 from developing
countries
 like Pakistan, Afghanistan, India prefer to get education from developed
countries
 likes Canada, the United Kingdom as their literacy rate is high as compared to their
countries
. And
this
 way, the
students
 going for student exchange program gets to have more knowledge.
Secondly
, they become more mature in their early life because they have to leave their homes and
this
 results in great strength whether it's mentally or physically.
For example
,
students
 in LUMS form swapped country scheme performs well in their undergraduates and graduates program better than the local
students
. The disadvantage of
this
 includes the cultural shock. When the
students
 in their early life leave their
countries
.
As a result
, they become part of other
countries
 and are exposed to their unfamiliar customs and different beliefs which could lead them to conflicts and misunderstanding.
Moreover
, when they adapt
living
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 without their family they opt for permanent residency in that particular country.
For example
, there are 13000
students
 in Australia waiting for their permanent residency. Connecting all the dots to a single point that everything has its strength and weakness but looking at the brighter side
students
 in developing nations are getting a chance to study abroad and explore their options.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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