Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays famous sportsmen can get a salary higher than some professionals with high responsibility and it is argued if
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situation is completely fairly or not.
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essay will discuss both sides of the arguments in-depth and will draw a possible conclusion with my opinion. On the one hand,
sport
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is not just a leisure activity but an essential part of life for those athletes who started doing some type of
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since their childhood, sacrificing free time, working hard and doing everything so
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to achieve success. Apparently, the duration of
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career is definitely short so that after 30-35 years old their career path is over and that's why sportsmen deserve
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enormous payment.
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, a famous Russian tennis player Denis Rybakov had got paid a few
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rubles per year,
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, at his 32 ages he got a severe injury and couldn't continue to play anymore so,
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, he was able to create the tennis
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school for children by using money he had earnt before.
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, positions related to education, health care should be paid at least as much as football players. Not to mention, it is crucially important to support employees that play an essential role for the whole community.
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, so to become a doctor in Russia a person should study in a medical university for more than 8 years so after that these individuals are responsible for people's lives and
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much more complicated than doing
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. In conclusion, my point is
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sportspeople probably spend a lot of effort during their life, other more significant for society professionals surely have to get more competitive salary compared to famous sportsmen.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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