Ownership of mobile phones has risen dramatically in recent years despite the potentially harmful effects they may have on our health and the society. Governments should introduce measures to restrict ownership of mobile phones to those who need them for their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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I trust you must be doing well. It has been a long time since our
last
talk about our personal and professional life. When we had
a
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spoken previously, you had informed me about your new
business
venture vertical. I am considering
to enter
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into the field of
business
and it’s all because of you. As you know, my innovations mean creating something new and being progressive. I am excited to venture into food delivery and it has been quite an ecstatic moment for me. I have always thought to follow the rule of “Start small, think big”. The
business
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good funding at the start but would surely require your suggestions as to progress
further
and learn perseverance.
Also
, I would only think of you to get started considering your success in
business
. It’s been quite some time we haven’t met, and to be able to get success in my venture, I would like to have a word with you so
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proceed
further
. Hoping to meet you soon.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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