some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace tradtional newspaper and magazines to what extend do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that these days using
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becoming very strong side.
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the traditional newspaper and magazines less
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than
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world ?the topic
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one of the controversial issues today. In
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from both viewpoints.
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side of the argument, there are people who argue. The main
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for believing
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the
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nowadays are not know about these papers and did not deal with
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on
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and other activities. In another word, they
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the
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On the other hand
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it. They often have another opinion because most of their life was without any technologies. It will be difficult for them to live with something new if they spend 80%
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their life on certain
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were know
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the news by buying
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newspapers but now they can accept the changes but not totally. To sum up, there are no best answers
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this
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However
, I tend to believe that using technologies is a good option especially if it will minimize the time and cost. But not totally replace with the papers to save our eyes from any bad influence that can
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