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Many beleive that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in countryside? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, people dwelling in the urban areas become increasingly prevalent, it is concerned that the life of the countryside is equivalent to the lifestyle of the city. I partially agree with
this
 point of view, due to the fact that both areas provide the resident with diverse opportunities. On the one hand, there is ample evidence that living in the urban field allows people to obtain higher education and educate themselves with good academic prospects.
For instance
, A research survey has revealed that students who studied in city colleges or schools have performed better in national or international exams while those who lived in the village could not prepare efficiently due to the lack of opportunity.
Moreover
, there are multifarious job offers by great companies in cities as compared to the rural areas.
On the other hand
, the environment in the countryside field is very pure and free from pollution and people living in
this
 area are getting more nutritional and organic food. Due to the fact that
,
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 they become healthier than those who dwell very far away from these surroundings.
For example
, researchers show that communities who are getting ill regularly on a daily basis are living in cities.
Although
, every necessary facility are there in villages
such
 as internet access, hospitals etc. To recapitulate, it can be clearly seen that living in a city and in a rural area has both advantages and disadvantages. Even though, the area of some villages are not developed yet and needs improvement which clearly predicated that urbanisation will inflict a new lifestyle
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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