To improve the job prospects, some people want the secondery schools to spend more time teaching communication and business skills and spend less time teaching history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Over the
last
two or three decades,
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job opportunities
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been changed tremendously than ever before due to
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globalization.
As a result
, communication and business sectors have tons of employment opportunities among the society,
hence
, some think that the secondary schools teach an enormous period of these subject and
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less time to teaching
history
. I strongly agree with
this
statement for the following reasons.
To begin
with, these fields have
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enormous work
chances
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among the
world
. The
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companies are required only these kinds of sectors due to globalization,
thus
, more and more organisation have a chance to
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their companies in another country in order for
employmennt
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employment
chances are increased an enormously than
history
,
therefore
, the
seecondary
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secondary
schools should be taught management and IT related class more time
instead
of
history
subject.
For example
, in
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almost many schools are only taught management
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courses
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because they prepare
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their students for
this
competitive
world
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the booming industry.
Moreover
,
this
trend can be created more entrepreneurs
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around the
world
when the educational institutions teach
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the
amnagerial
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managerial
skills and entrepreneur development.
In
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history
does not apply
our
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day-to-day life so the parents should not
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history
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to
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their children
in
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the secondary level.
For instance
, less than 30% of the schoolboys like to study
history
subject
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around the
world
. Because
history
field is now out of
industry
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the industry
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in
this
modern era. To conclude, technology
anad
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and
business skill courses are given more work opportunities than any other field,
therefore
, some believe that educational
institution
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institutions
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should be teaching more period for communication and business
skill
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skills
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and takes less time to
teaching
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history
.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with
this
statement in the
aboove
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above
-mentioned details. I hope
this
trend gives
an
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enormous job
chances
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chance
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to around the
world
in order for reducing the unemployment ratio.
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