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Some people believe that it is a good idea that older people continue to work if it is possible for them to do. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Remain active and healthy has always been appreciable.
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, I respect seniors specially those who remain active till 80 plus age and more.
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 most families never allow their elder to work as their childrens get adult and starts earning money.even though, I strongly agree with the essay and would like to embark few convincing point to get more understanding on it.
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 of all, intellectual seniors are always welcoming in any big organisation, despite of the retirement age reaches, most of the company transfer them on contractual basis and keep benefiting by their knowledge and experience.
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 : multinational company shift there old staff either to the board of directors else put them on contractual basis.
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, our society has a psychological problems of keeping and nurturing their old parents, which is alarming, but If father or mother are bearing their own expense even by doing light jobs they can't be considered burderend to anyone.
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: If we look around the old homes mostly are those gardians that have poor son and daughters ana they cannot afford them . What a shame?
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, we all should encourage our elders to dress up, paying visit to different clubs, play golf, enjoy their free time with grandchildren.
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, if they keep doing counselling in their specific field . Their life will be more easier.
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,any old couple could reach to that level , seniors should keep them healthy and fit.There is no harm of doing job or business , that may actually make them more stronger and confident citizen even at the age of 80.
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